Sunday, March 11, 2012
Blog #1
In this blog i will be discussing the introduction to Walter Mosley's piece Workin' on the chain gang. This summary should be viewed without bias, Workin' is a piece meant to show people that regardless of race, color, or creed we are all struggling in the world. In his introduction Mosley says some very powerful things concerning our capitalistic society and its negligent attitude towards basic humanity. He speaks of how Black Americans are demonized so many years after the end of slavery and even after civil rights had allegedly been granted to them. Though he focuses on black struggle, he conveys the idea that we are all experiencing this struggle. A keyword which can be used to describe the ways he discusses our society is apathetic. He speaks of our capitalistic society which places value on every human life. It is careless towards those deemed to have no value. In one part of his intro he talks about decisions that are made by those we elect to govern us. These decisions rarely are made to promote happiness among the people of the world. These decision are usually influenced by the possibility for monetary gain. Mosley makes many important points in his intro, one point he made i believe to be important was when he said "Our abilities far outmatch our actions. This is because our actions, and the actions taken in our name, are truly not ours to govern"(Mosley 5). I find this quote to be crucial to one of Mosley's main points. He brings up the point that although we expect politicians voted into office to represent our wants and needs, they frequently do not. Mosley expresses that business and government have blended to a point where political actions are taken for financial gain and no longer for the good of the common man.
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Hello Robbie. My name is Janet and I have been given the privilege of reading your work. I like how you told me right away what you were going to be discussing in your summary. You seemed to have touched on everything that the professor asked of you. You really did a great job at summarizing Mosley's piece of work because without even knowing what the text was about I understood the idea that Mosley was trying to convey. Keep an eye out for little grammatical errors here and there. Such as capitalization, run on sentences, and spacing. Always make sure to proof read to make sure there are no errors so that your reader is able to grasp what it is you are trying to say. It seems to me that you are very involved with politics since you made text to world connections in your writing. I liked your take on the society we live in today and how it is connected to what Mosley wrote about. I really look forward to reading more of your work in the future and I thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your blog.
ReplyDeleteHi Robby, my name is Kedeshia. I am practicing Peer Tutor in Prof Rogers-Coopers' ENG 220 class. I would like to start off by saying that your overall structure for a summary is good. You illustrated that you understand the concept and what is to be included. You included the main idea as well as quoting from the text. Your vocabulary and subject-verb agreements may need improvements. For example, you began writing about the piece but only wrote part of the title. You do not have to restate the title if it's already written. When writing academically, you should write formal standards, such as 'Introduction' rather than 'Intro'. Also, try to use commas and periods to separate your ideas so it does not become a run-on sentence. To conclude my review, as a writer in ENG 103, I believe your writing is well put and allows the reader to understand your point of view despite minor grammatical errors. From my understanding of your summary, Moseley believes that the structure of government and politics has a major effect on humanity. Just remember to proof read and spell check on your next blog. Thank you for your blog.
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